Not enough people realize the importance of natural world. What is the reason for people's lack of awareness? How can people be made more aware?

In recent years, an increasing
numbers
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number
of parents consider
school's drawbacks
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the school's drawbacks
, which way is the most
efficient whether
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efficient, whether
the children should take
home
schooling
at
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in
their
home
or not. And
this
has heated
beenthe
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been the
subject of discussion. I personally believe that
young generation
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the young generation
should attend
school
in the sense that
this
is better for children in an educative way. On the one hand, it is partly true that if children study in their safe
home
, they would be provided with high quality education by well-trained
home
schooling teacher. They can learn a few majors which they
wnt
feel or have a desire for; want strongly
want
to know or they have a lot of interests more in-depth than
other
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others
who attend the
school
students.
Furthermore
, from the double-income couples point of view, they can work without any anxiety in that their children study in the safety zone, so that parents can
concentratee
make denser, stronger, or purer
concentrate
concentrate e
on their work harder than other parents who are left their children in
school
.
For example
,
thesedays
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these days
, there are a number of sexual crimes and kidnappings
aimng
point or cause to go (blows, weapons, or objects such as photographic equipment) towards
aiming
at teenagers. So
home
schoolings effective in terms of
rotectio
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rotating
rotation
them from numbers of dangerous situations.
Nevertheless
, I am
firmy
with resolute determination
firmly
convinced that attending
school
makes children more sociable person. The place of
school
gives kids not only various
situations but
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situations, but
also
unpredictable
occasions
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occasions, then
then
children will able to improve
theirsolving
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their solving
problem skill by putting perplex situations,
also
acquiring how to release
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an open clash between two opposing groups (or individuals)
conflicts
convicts
between
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a friend’s relationship
. Another point worth
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make reference to
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is that
childrencan
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children can
increase their knowledge by attending a rich variety of courses. To illustrate in detail, they can share their ideas each other and discuss to deal with diverse topics, it naturally leads them more creative as well as triggers their interests of studying through a lot of
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a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
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trips and events with their peer groups. In conclusion,
this
issue is still debatable in many parents who have young children or have teenagers already attending
school
, but I personally contend that it is essential that
chilren
a young person of either sex
children
should be sent to the educational institution.

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