The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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We were given
to
visual aids both of them are circle graphs. Change preposition
apply
On
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In
first
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the first
chart
we can find Add a comma
,chart
an information
about the quantity of Remove the article
information
a piece of information
use
Replace the word
used
energy
Australian housekeeping in accordance with this
second
chart
illustrate
the percentages of greenhouse Change the verb form
illustrates
gas
which was released as a result
of consumed energy
.
Overall
, it is fair for both charts that water heating needs a big amount of energy
(30%), therefore
, produces approximately the same volume of greenhouse gas
(32%). however
, the heating part of the first graph
takes the biggest share, whereas
in reference to the second
graph
it generates three times less Add a comma
,graph
gas
.
The pie chart
about Australian household energy
use clearly shows that heating and water heating occupy most of the chart
42
% and 30% respectively. The area of other appliances takes less than a fifth of the Change preposition
at 42
energy
. 7% of the used energy
is spent on refrigeration. So, the lowest share of graph
is occupied by cooling 2% and Add an article
the graph
a graph
lightning
systems.
Correct your spelling
lighting
on the other
hand
the Add a comma
,hand
second
circle graph
demonstrates the consequences of consumed energy
. According to
this
water heating system
and other appliances produce the highest amount of Fix the agreement mistake
systems
gas
emission (about 30%). Heating and refrigeration parts of graph
Correct article usage
the graph
releases
the same volume of greenhouse Change the verb form
release
gas
related to 15 and 14 per cent. 8% of gas
emission is generated by lightning
Add an article
the lightning
system
. The least amount of waste is produced by Fix the agreement mistake
systems
cooling
area in regards to the consumed Correct article usage
the cooling
energy
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy, gas, graph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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