The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy, gas, graph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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