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Wealthy countries should acceptor refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what do you agree or disagree?

#countries #acceptor #refugees #assistance #food
Some people say that wealthy countries have to accept and support refugees. In my opinion, the responsibility of helping to refugees should divided
to
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into
by
 wealthy countries depending on their abilities and political situation in these countries. Any wealthy country should take an amount of refugees depending on their
economical
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economic
 abilities. Nobody argues that developed countries should help refugees, but it should not lead to economic difficulties. If some country has a political
problems
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problem
ar
introduces an alternative
or
are
area
 even if there is a possibility of causing political problems from opening the door to refugees, they should not open the door to enter
,
Accept space
,
 but they should provide
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 types of assistance
such
 as delivering food or equipments.
For instance
, in countries with a small amount of people, entering refuges may cause issues. They may not have enough police. It
cause
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causes
 the increase of criminalities. In conclusion, the responsibility to assist the refugees should not take only one country, it should divided into several countries depending specific factors

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