Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Some
believes
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believe
music
is
postive way
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a positive way
positive way
to make people connected of various
tradition
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traditions
and ages.
This
essay agrees
thaat
pointing out something
that
music
can be helpful in
togetherneess
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the togetherness
togetherness
of every
people
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person
.
This
essay will
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discus
how
music
is a good option for bringing people together.
Firstly
,
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,
music
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the music
has a various type
,
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,
considered as international or traditional
music
.Everyone connects threw anything with the
music
.In many lower territory has language
problems but
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problems, but
they can connect with
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
just by the
music
.
For example
,
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,
there are
manu
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
international events
on
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in
with
music
,
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,
in which participants from various countries all over the world.
This
is the chance to
understanding
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understand
each others' cultures and tradition in the
from
the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
form
of
music
.In the
singapore
a country in southeastern Asia on the island of Singapore; achieved independence from Malaysia in 1965
Singapore
,
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,
there is
a
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an
international
music
competition held every 2 years in which all citizens
from
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of
the world take part and shown their culture.
Secondly
,
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,
music
make interest to everyone of different ages.It cab be soulful to everybody from
adolscents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
to older.
people
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People
likes
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like
to listen
music
from their past to present.We can say that
music
and its
rythms
the basic rhythmic unit in a piece of music
rhythms
can
heals
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heal
person's hurts or treat them mentally.
For instance
,
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,
there are many types of
music
like
sliping
the state of being asleep
sleeping
slipping
music
,
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,
meditation
music
that can
person
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personally
listen while suffering from specific condition.If a patient have mental health and headache from time to time
,
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,
are
encourage
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encouraged
to enjoy meditation
music
to keep their soul balance.Many people find
this
solutin
a homogeneous mixture of two or more substances; frequently (but not necessarily) a liquid solution
solution
and does not require specific ages. We can say that
music
plays a vital role in our lives and has
ability
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the ability
to glue people from
multitude
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a multitude
of cultural sectors and ages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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