In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are main cause of crime? How can we deal with those cause?

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rrent socio economic scenario,
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the current socio economic scenario
a current socio economic scenario
it is observed that
cr
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ime rate i
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the crime rate
s increasing globally. United States, India, middle east, many countries in Africa, Mexico, Brazil, many countries in Europe ha
ve observed t
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has observed
hat
cr
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ime like d
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crime, like
rug dealing, human trafficking, gang war, rape, ma
rder,
unlawful premeditated killing of a human being by a human being
murder
co
munal r
for or by a group rather than individuals
communal
iots and all other ki
nd o
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kinds
f crimes are increasing in
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with
ach year. In my understanding, there is no one single cause for
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global in
creament o
a device that requires skill for proper use
instrument
f
crime
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rate. Poverty and un
empolyment a
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
re one of ma
in factor a
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the main factor
mong the others. Now-a-days, mane fake news spread through social media to create a co
munal i
for or by a group rather than individuals
communal
mbalance in the society and which causes riots and vandalism. People are becoming im
patient which s
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impatient, which
ometimes becoming outburst as a criminal movement. Sometimes pe
otent a
a document granting an inventor sole rights to an invention
patent
patient
patents
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aist a
in contact with
against
ny go
verment i
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
nstitution is becoming a violent ag
ition d
a mental state of extreme emotional disturbance
agitation
ue to mi
scommunication.
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Al
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so some h
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Also, some
uman lost their humanity to quick and huge money using illegal drug dealing, smuggling and tr
aficking.
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
trafficking
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this
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, some te
rrost o
a radical who employs terror as a political weapon; usually organizes with other terrorists in small cells; often uses religion as a cover for terrorist activities
terrorist
rganization using their own st
ratigy t
an elaborate and systematic plan of action
strategy
strategies
o br
ain w
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the brain
as the trapped people and using them ag
aist t
in contact with
against
he humanity. Illegal arms are available all over the world, which is causing easy access to modernized arm to local people, which is leading to criminal activity. Power mongers are using criminal to create an
ercy i
a state of lawlessness and disorder (usually resulting from a failure of government)
anarchy
n so
city a
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
s well as
this
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will help them to re
aim i
one of a pair of long straps (usually connected to the bit or the headpiece) used to control a horse
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roam
reign
n power. Dealing with the
crime
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, there are two most effective ways – education and remove poverty. Local go
vement a
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nd social activist should take action to educate people. Kn
oweledge i
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Knowledge
s very powerful which will help people to di
fferenciate b
mark as different
differentiate
differentiates
difference
etween good and bad. Education should be made mandatory for each ch
ildren o
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child
f the country. Education will bring the light of wi
som i
accumulated knowledge or erudition or enlightenment
wisdom
n the society which will remove the eclipse of
crime
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from society.
Also
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poverty is pushing people to chose the path illegal activity. Go
verment m
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Government
ust take some active and distribute the fund so that poor people can buy the thing that they need but theft. Even some vocational training ca
n be introduce i
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can introduce
can be introduced
n free of cost so that people can earn their lively hood. Nobel lo
riate P
worthy of the greatest honor or distinction
laureate
rof Abhijit Bandhypadhay shows that poor people should have more buying power to decrease the
crime
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rate.
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reover all p
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Moreover, all
eople need to have responsible all over the world so that
crime
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can never take place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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