Today‘s children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Despite a continuing improvement in standard of living, many people believe/ opine that young people suffer more
stress
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than older generations. I definitely agree with the statement and shall put forth my arguments to support my views in the following paragraphs. As the foremost, teenagers are exposed to more products than the previous earlier generations as they are living in a modern consumerist society. Through films and the media they see celebrities with expensive
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
, clothes and cars.
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, youth oriented advertising gives them an awareness of the latest technology
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as digital music formats and mobile phones.
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, teenagers are under
pressured
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pressure
to acquire these items.
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stresses were not so strong during earlier times.
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, pressures at school are stronger than before. Competition is very tough. Today‘s children have to compete with children from all over the globe. Teenagers must succeed in their studies so that they can compete for the best jobs. Parental pressure, examinations and homework are all reported as causing increased levels of strain.
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stress
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was not that severe
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at
earlier times.
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, today‘s children are faced with a new type of
stress
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. They are faced with a choice of two cultures (cultural combination/ cross-cultural/ cultural assimilation). One
culture
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, the global
culture
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, is the one they want to adopt and the other is the traditional
culture
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which they are forced to adopt by their parents. They are in a dilemma and
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causes
stress
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that has never been experienced by the earlier generations. To sum up, consumerism and academic pressures are powerful causes of
stress
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on today‘s teenagers. To add to it there is the pressure of sticking to the traditional
culture
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. So, definitely today‘s children are under greater pressure than that faced by earlier generations.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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