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People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Life
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 in the past and today
are
Suggestion
were
 totally different. There are people who claim that the living
conditions many
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conditions, many
 years ago was better than what people have today.
This
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 claim could be argued because there are so many advancements developed today that have made
life
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 more comfortable than the past. Undoubtedly,
life
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 in the past had
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own beauty. One thing was their lives were simpler because of fewer distractions. There were no internet and people really establish connections with each other in the present.
For instance
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, Facebook and other social media sites were non-existent and people make friends with people in their locality.
Second
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 thing, in the past, there were less traffic, overpopulated cities, and less pollution. The cities were not congested because there were fewer number of people and urbanization was not yet popular. According to articles about
life
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 in the past,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
 of citizens stay in their rural areas or hometown because of lack of
transporation
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
 facilities,
thus
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 overcrowding and traffic congestion
were not even considered
Suggestion
was not even considered
 problems.
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, despite of the charm of old living, it had
poses
Suggestion
posed
 major difficulties to the citizenry. The old times had no efficient forms of transportation and communication.
For instance
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, travelling from provincial lands
to
being one more than one
two
 cities takes days via buses or trains.
Also
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, people had to use snail mails to communicate
to
Suggestion
with
 relatives or friends who are living far. These problems are no longer existent in the twenty-
first
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 century because of technological advancements and the invention of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
. Today,
life
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 is more enjoyable to live than the past. The development of technology raised the living conditions by making it easier and faster. There are many equipment invented in order for people to have
time
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 to do activities they enjoy or develop other useful skills. One example is the use of electrical home appliances, these items consumes less
time
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 and effort to perform household chores,
such
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 as vacuum and washing machines.
Subsequently
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, with less
time
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 on the these chores, family members can have
time
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 to bond and children can have more parental attention. Another advantage of living in the present is the increased availability of information and fast communication. These advancements had changed the shape of different lives of people into better ones. Many people have lifted themselves out of poverty, and others have found more positive sense in their well-being. Overall, it cannot be denied that there would always be people who would prefer to live
life
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 like in the past than in the present.
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, it cannot be denied that the tremendous positive shift of living conditions makes the present more enjoyable to live
.
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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