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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the mean
temperature
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 per month,
whereas
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 the table demonstrates the
hours
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 of sunshine
in
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on
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 average in a year in
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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although
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London
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 and New
York
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 become warmer
but
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the temperatures start to decrease near the end of the year, the opposite trend is true for
Sydney
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. In January, the
temperature
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 in
London
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 is higher than
New
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in New
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York
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 with figures 8 and
around
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5 respectively. As the temperatures in both cities continue to rise, the
temperature
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 in New
York
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 becomes higher than
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London
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in London
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 in
middle
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 of March; the figures go up gradually and reach peaks in July (just under 30 and around 23) before showing a downward trend until December with a lower
temperature
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 in New
York
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 than in
London
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. Turning to
Sydney
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, the
temperature
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 starts to decline from January to July and
then
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 rises back
in
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 the end of the year with the lowest point just above 15. From the table, it is observed that New
York
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 has the highest number of
hours
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 exposed to the sunshine (2535
hours
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) and that was slightly higher than that of
Sydney
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 (2473
hours
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).
Total
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The total
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hours
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 of sunshine in
London
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 was the least and that was 1180
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, hours, london, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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