The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The table illustrates the demographics of
Australia
as well as
Malaysia
between the years 1980 and 2002.
Overall
,from the year 1980 to 2002 the
population
figures in both countries are
in
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upward
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trend;
nevertheless
, that of
Malaysia
is remarkably higher than in
Australia
.
Whereas
the percentage of
men
and
women
are slightly distinctive, the whole
population
,
rate
of birth, the
growth
of
population
yearly and the elderly witness
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change. In 22 years, the entire
population
of
Australia
considerably goes up from 14.7
million
to 19.6
million
, but it is less dramatic than that of
Malaysia
. The data
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Malaysia
in 2002, which is 24.3
million
is nearly twice as high as that in 1980 about 13.7
million
. Despite the stability of the
rate
of
men
and
women
in
Australia
, 49.9
million
and 50.1
million
respectively, in
Malaysia
, the proportion of
men
gradually climbs about 0,3% and the statistic for
women
decline
0,3
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%., Unlike
Malaysia
, the figure for
men
is less than that for
women
in
Australia
. The two nations experience a downward trend in the
rate
of infants in 2002 with 0,2% in
Australia
and noticeably1% in
Malaysia
. The
growth
of
population
every year on average in
Australia
enormously rises
1
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%;
however
, the
rate
of
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growth
in
Malaysia
drops
0,3
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% and
Australia
has significantly lower
growth
rates. The proportion of the aged in
Australia
grows dramatically by 2,8%, which is more substantial than the rising figure in
Malaysia
by 0,6%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, malaysia, population, men, women, rate, growth, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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