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It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. How could robots be used in the future ? Will this development be a positive or a negative development?

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Momentarily, in the contemporary world, there are various technologies which through masses overcome their problem rapidly. Robots do essential part of
modern era
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the modern era
. Some people assume that robots are crucial things for present globe.
however
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However
, I believe that it is
negative development
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a negative development
 for
country
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the country
. My explanation is given in
further
 paragraphs with suitable examples. To commence with
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,
 there are certain problems which will be occur if robots are going to increase in our lives.
Firstly
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,
 the
rasio
the relative magnitudes of two quantities (usually expressed as a quotient)
ratio
 of unemployment will be enhance which is
major drawback
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a major drawback
the major drawback
 for
nation
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the nation
a nation
. In exemplify
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,
 globalisation through myriad of opportunities rapidly decrease for youth
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 There are abundant people have not job platform to overcome their earnings problems. So
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,
 if
authorities
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the authorities
 will try to involve robots for
working
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working, then
then
 it is
major impact
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a major impact
 for people and country.
Second reason
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The second reason
 is, not all the industries and factories will buy robots because rates of robots is high
.
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.
 Which is essential for middle worker.
For instance
, some small industry's
turn over
the ratio of the number of workers that had to be replaced in a given time period to the average number of workers
turnover
us
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 quiet
lowest
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low
.
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.
thus
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Thus
,
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,
 they
can not
can not
cannot
 afford to buy robots
.
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.
Moreover
, robots work depends on programming methods which is set by
human but
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human, but
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,
 some time method of robots will be change or damage
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 At that time all the work going on wrong way which is detrimental things for their
owner
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owners
 and people too. On the flip side
,
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,
 robots through
plethora
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the plethora
a plethora
 of problem overcome in
easy way
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an easy way
 and extremely.
Moreover
,
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,
robots
also
 used in agriculture for cropping. To recapitulate with
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,
 in
future robots
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the future robots
 will be very useful for all places and by using Robots people get fast result in all
fielts
having an (over)abundance of flesh
fats
faults
 but some drawbacks is
also
 occur
of
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by
from
 using robots.

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