A lot of old people suffering from loneliness these days. They also lack physical fitness. What are the reasons for these? Can you think of possible solutions?
A group of elderly citizens is now
being
lonely Verb problem
apply
due to
not being able to move with the younger family members from place to place, as they lack physical health conditions. This
essay will discuss the premise associated with senior citizens being on their own in contrast
with an explanation of resolving this
matter.
There are innumerable individuals who are self-made
person and too stubborn to be dependable on someone else, including family, Add an article
a self-made
therefore
, they face the
dire companionship issues because of self-esteem. Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, there are people who long for the love of family members, but, since being busy with work life nor
their kids Correct word choice
apply
neither
relatives, have enough time to spare for them. Correct word choice
or
As a result
, they end up in nursing homes in
the supervision of a full-time nurse because of a health condition.
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under
However
, just like every lock has a key, there are possible ways to overcome loneliness for an aged person. If each family member takes less time from their busy schedule to spend with the elderly, then
situation
won’t be Correct article usage
the situation
this
much empty for them. For example
, organizing a weekly get
Add a hyphen
get-together
together with
all the children will cheer their minds. In addition
, support groups for the parents and grandparents, where they take a walk in the park, practice
laughing therapy with their own agers is a miraculous option to overshadow the isolated feelings.
Correct word choice
and practice
To conclude
, for a
time being, everyone is entitled to face isolation and non-adaptive situations, which doesn’t mean there is no escape to Correct article usage
the
this
remote sense. With the help of family and friends, plenty of solutions can be figured out while
physical health can be improved by daily monitoring.Submitted by simranjeetak4747 on
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