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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
In what ways has technology affected the types of relation people make?
Has that become a positive or negative development?

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Problems relating to new technologies in general have always been one of the topical issues of all over the world. How should we deal with them, especially when it comes to relations that people make? How do they affect us? Are there more positive or rather negative effects in all that? Discussing these controversial questions it is impossible to give one well-defined answer for sure.

 On the one hand, it is obvious that IT allows us to get in touch with each other more easily.
 Probably nobody would argue that it is an advantage. We can make new friends from quite a wide range of places even on the other continents. But what is more important for me,
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, I can daily contact my family living thousands kilometres away from Skype. From my point of view,
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it definitely makes sense
. It helps me stay aware of my family’s circumstances and brings me closer to my mum and dad.
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 attitude may cause a lot of concerns among people who believe that it is not real communication. Nobody can deny that it is impossible to replace face-to-face conversations with virtual ones totally. Of crucial importance, in my opinion, is how we define the matter in question. Going back to my point of ‘distant’ friends, are they real friends? People who you never see in person come into your life and sometimes may influence your decisions,
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. I would stay quite cautious about that. But it is necessary to take into account all the circumstances of each individual case. I think it is impossible to estimate all the benefits and drawbacks of technology affecting our relations with different people.
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