Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

People have different views about whether children should spend all of leisure
time
with their family or
this
is unnecessary. w
hile
Suggestion
While
spending
time
with families can bring children a great deal of benefits;
nevertheless
, children
also
need to have p
eriod
Suggestion
a period
periods
of free
time
with other relationships. On the one hand, family plays an essential role in y
oungers’
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
developing and growing. Obviously, there is a very close bond between children and parents;
therefore
, parents have the most powerful influence on a child’s development.
For instance
, under parental supervision help children to well-behave more properly in social.
Moreover
, the parents are r
ole model
Suggestion
the role model
role models
of children;
thus
, parents will have opportunities for teaching their children.
Additionally
, the family is p
lace
Suggestion
a place
the place
where y
oungers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
are received the safety, and children have better an education instituted.
On the other hand
, nowadays, young often spend
time
for their friends because their parents devote a large amount of
time
to their work and seem to leave no
time
for their offspring.
Besides
, if children play with their fried without direct management from family,
this
leads to children will become more independent.
For example
, f
riend relationship
Accept comma addition
friend, relationship
also
brings children other advantages,
such
as children share easily anything together without, they cannot talk with their parents. Spending free
time
with friend help children.
Furthermore
, children can learn c
onsiderable amount
Suggestion
a considerable amount
considerable amounts
from their friends. In conclusion, children spend
t
ime free
Accept comma addition
time, free
time
with their families bring the advantage out weight the disadvantage;
however
, other relationship as friend is
also
necessary.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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