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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is it? What are the best ways to reduce this problem?

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In today`s world of
globalization modern
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globalization, modern
 people often seeks to travel anther country for various reasons
such
 as for study, work or immigration and some of them may face many issues by changing their
county
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
 to live in.
however
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However
, feeling discomfort because they are a long way off from their home is considered one of the initial problems that faced by many of them. There are several reasons behind homesickness especially for people who are not adaptable or have lived mostly
at
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in
 one place for years in their home country. So that type of people often habituated with their own
culture lifestyle
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culture, lifestyle
 and natural environment of the homeland. The other important aspect behind
this
 problem is the lack of sense of belonging
for
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to
 the people of
new country
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the new country
 and
this
 may cause to feel
also
 influences both physical and psychological
condition
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conditions
 of a person. Every aspect, cultural shock, loneliness and environmental problems
is
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are
 the
basic
a relation that provides the foundation for something
basis
 for homesickness. The important thing to tackle these problems is
change
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changing
 one’s outlook and accepting
new changes
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the new changes
 happening around you. People should try to be open for
new culture
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new cultures
a new culture
 and challenges. They need to prepare them to be as adaptable and independent as they can. In order to struggle with
lonesome
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a lonesome
, they may set up
easy
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easily
 and quickly and regularly communication with their own family. Due to create more convenient state
to
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for
 themselves, they need to be patient and make the right circumstances around them. In conclusion, there will always be challenges to face homesickness and they can do a lot to reduce it. I personally think that people should try and prepare themselves for study or work abroad.
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