The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
The given pie charts represent the reason why
people
use these two transportations, including bicycles and cars for travel.
Overall
, Most people
travel by car because they need comfort and the distance from their home to work
is too far. However
, cycling to work
is suitable for people
who take care of yourself
well and Correct pronoun usage
themselves
town
that have less pollution.
Fix the agreement mistake
towns
According to
the data, people
use bicycles for many reasons
. The main reasons
are for
their health and less pollution, which Change preposition
apply
both
responsible for 30%. Other Add a missing verb
are both
reasons
are cycling no need to find a park, cheaper than a car and can avoid traffic jams, from the survey these reasons
are voted at 15%, 13%, and 12% respectively.
In contrast
, Driving to work
have many advantages. Comfortable is one of the reasons
why people
choose cars. It occupies 40%, followed by 21% of the reason that home is far from work
. The rest is time concern
, Fix the agreement mistake
concerns
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
some
luggage, and safety, which account Correct quantifier usage
apply
around
14%.Change preposition
for around
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