You work in an international company. Write a letter to the manager for allowing extra hours off during work time to attend family celebration. In your letter, you should Explain why you want to take a day off Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away.

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Dear

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Thompson, I am writing to kindly ask for a day off

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week. My parents will celebrate 50 years of marriage and all my family will gather for

this

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occasion

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Tuesday. I intend to cover my work

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Saturday. Let me explain my situation. My parents live in Sighisoara, my sister lives in London and my brother lives in Tokyo. We have not met as a whole family for more than two years.

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, my brother and my sister have not seen their newborn niece so far so, they would be very happy to meet her.

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, the celebration, which

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is known as

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wedding” is as important for my parents as it was their wedding 50 years ago. As you can see, it is a very important event for my family, and I would really like to attend

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, you do not worry about my work.

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, I am ahead of the schedule with my tasks.

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, my colleague, Alexa, will take care of any emergencies

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occur.

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but not least, I will cover all my working hours

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Saturday. Thank you in advance for your kind cooperation. I look forward to receiving your reply. Yours sincerely, Jane O’ Hara

Thu Feb 27 2020

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

207 words

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You work in an international company. Write a letter to the manager for allowing extra hours off during work time to attend family celebration. In your letter, you should Explain why you want to take a day off Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Some people believe that advertising manipulates consumers into buying unnecessary products. Discuss the reasons why advertising can be so powerful and what measures can be taken to protect consumers.