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Some jobs are based at a single work place where the hours are the same each day, while other jobs involve frequent travel and irregular working hours. Discuss the advantage of both types of job and give your own opinion about which one is best.

#jobs #work #place #hours #travel #advantage #job
There are many
people
 in the world
that
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who
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 would rather
to
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apply
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work
 in a place that
have
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has
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same
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the same
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 working
hours
 every day or
to
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apply
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work
 in a
job
 with flexible working
hours
. Even though both of them are quite ideal for a
work place
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workplace
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,
people
 would prefer one more than the other.
Therefore
, in
this
essay
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essay,
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 we are going to talk about the advantages of those types of
job
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jobs
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 and select which one is the best. On
one
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the one
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 hand, I believe that working the same
hours
 every day is an important advantage. Considering the fact that
people
 can have the ability to organise their time, outside the working
hours
, as they want is a plus
at
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in
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 their life. From my experience, I used to
work
 in Greece in
office
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an office
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9
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from 9
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am to 5pm, Monday to Friday and always I had prepared my plans for
this
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these
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 days.
In addition
, it had been a lot easier for my family and friends to hang out and
having
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have
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 some fun as the fixed working
hours
 are giving a significant touch in our lives.
On the other hand
, I guess that having a
job
 with irregular shifts and frequent
travels
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travel
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 is
also
 nice. A good example of
this
 is the kind of freedom that we can obtain from
this
 type of
job
 is something special.
For instance
, working
while
 travelling is an incredible experience because
people
 are gaining much more knowledge from countries that they didn't know before.
To sum up
, I think working on a daily
bases
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basis
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 at the same
hours
,
people
 might feel that most of the
times
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time
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 can control much better their individual life and they have opportunities
such
 as staying with their families and good friends,
thing
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things
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 that you can't easily do when you have flexible shifts.
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Task Response
Improve the task response by clearly stating your opinion on which type of job you believe is best. Make sure to fully address the advantages of both types of jobs and provide a balanced view before giving your opinion.
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Work on enhancing coherence and cohesion by organizing your essay into clear paragraphs with topic sentences. Ensure that your ideas are logically connected and transitions between paragraphs are smoother. Additionally, provide more specific examples to support your points effectively.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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