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demand for food is increasing worldwide. whats the cause of this? what measures can the international community take to meet these demands?

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The biggest problem right now the whole world dealing with is the lack of
food
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 resources for the growing population in almost every part of the world. Researchers expect the worldwide population to be around 13 billion by the year 2030. Countries like India, China, South Africa are some of the most populated countries in the world. Governments in different countries have already recognized
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these threats
this threat
 and are already thinking about the solutions. One of the counties "up in the game" is China. There was recent news about the Chinese government buying agricultural lands in New Zealand to feed the growing Chinese population. Some of the other countries, Where growing conditions for
food
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 are not ideal, They are experimenting with greenhouses, indoor farming, hydroponics,
aquaponics
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Aquaponics
, etc. These techniques allow farmers to grow their
food
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 all year round and do not require a natural environment other than sunlight. In these techniques,
Food
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 grows in a man-made environment designed for a particular crop.
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, Some of these ways have started paying back. Recent studies have shown that with these advancements in the farming industry, The
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 growth per sq feet is 10 times more than as compared to standard farming. Just to give an example, When in standard farming set up
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in
 1-acre land, One can grow up to one-ton weight of potatoes. Whereas, with the help of these new techniques
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 outcome can go up to 10-ton. To conclude, I would say, Ultimately, Human beings are living their life around
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, And they would never let a day come; Where, There is not enough
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. Governments are taking all the possible measures to deal with
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 threat and I hope they would succeed in that.

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