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Some think that teenagers should follow older people’s rules. Others thinks that it is natural for them to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Obedience to elderly is a common trait taught to us since we were young and the way it should be practice remains questionable. There are some who believed
that is
 a must for adolescents to obey, while others deem that it is inherent to question what they
tell
express in words
say
. I feel that the traits and values taught to us should be carried on throughout our lives. Obedience to
elderly
Suggestion
the elderly
 is said to be necessary for adolescents and
this
 is primarily because they were the ones who raised us from the start.
Furthermore
, they serve as our role models and  knew what is best. In
additon
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
 to, they are equipped with more experiences and knowledge. Disobedience to them could lead to misfortune,
such
 as teens could engage in drugs and
heinious
extremely wicked, deeply criminal
heinous
 crimes.
However
, it could
also
 be argued that it is their right to question the elderly as well. Adolescents could
distinguished
Suggestion
distinguish
 what is right and not all elderly serve as good examples. 
For instance
, they would be used in illegal trading and different kinds of abuse. There are some who are brave enough to speak their thoughts and avoid
such
 situations. They would rather exercise their right and seek help rather than obey. In
coclusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, there are arguments that support why obedience to elderly is a must and equally valid ones why adolescents should question them. In my opinion, obedience alone without understanding may cause harm,
therefore
 one must know when to speak and stand up.

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