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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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 modern era, schools are changing environment, now they are going to be more student friendly and teaching several types of skills to the kids. I agree with those people who argue that
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 should teach every
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 how to be a good parent Indeed, parental skills make youngsters more responsible and give maturity in beginning
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, during learning process
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 have a chance to learn more skills which leads to be a good parent like leadership, patience, maturity, positive thinker etc.
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, that initiative leads to the people to take care of children properly and make a better society. On top of it, they come to know about how difficult to take care children so that they start giving more respect to their parents.
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, in schools that age is for focusing more on studies and come to know about which profession they have an interest so that they can be kept working on it.
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youngster
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the youngster
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 has more important things to learn while studying in the
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 like building confidence, opt profession etc. To encapsulate,
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 is an important period of every young person to learn important skills which overcome the problem in the future. Parenting skills are
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 important with other skills so if
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 can learn in
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 life,
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 it will make more responsibilities between youngsters.
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