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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Over the years, people have been more interested in visiting a lot of places around the world. It is because they want to try something new to experience in terms of people, culture, scenery, adventure, etc. Visiting places where conditions are difficult is kind of a challenge they want to experience. There are benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit these
such
 places. Benefits differ from one person to another, one of the benefits they want to achieve or learn is to improve their self-confidence both physically and mentally.
For example
, when you are afraid of being alone in a foreign country, you will learn how to socialized with diverse nationalities. Another, some trips can be strenuous like walking and hiking. People conquer these challenges because they want to be fulfilled after the completion of the journey. The downside of
this
 is securing your safety because some places are extremely dangerous.
For example
, visiting colder places like the Antarctic, your body might not adapt to
this
changes
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 immediately. You will get sick and would not enjoy your whole trip. And sometimes you will be injured when trekking a high mountain. Going to tourist spots with
such
 conditions can be very much thrilling, exciting and can improve one’s self-confidence yet it can
also
 pose dangers and threats.
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