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Libraries should focus on improving their technological resources rather than in building a large collection of paper books. To what extent do you agree?

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Technology
 or Books, which is better, on which libraries should focus? Some people think libraries should focus on improving technologies while
on the other hand
, some people think exactly the opposite of
this
. They think there should be more books in the library. But in my opinion combination of both will be good. Though libraries should focus on improving
technology
 like there should be e-books in the libraries,
also
 there are many advantages of
technology
. The information can be stored in lesser space,
also
 you can download e-books from the internet for free. Along with
this
, it is difficult to manage books which occupy a lot of space, it takes time to search a book in
library
Suggestion
the library
a library
libraries
 and you search it easily in a computer if you have e-books. But as I earlier said, the combination of both books and
technology
 will be the best because everything has some advantages and disadvantages too, so does the
technology
 has.
For
instance not
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instance, not
 every book is available in digital format. Paper Books are more reliable because e-books can be deleted accidentally or malfunction.
Also
, it is more costly to maintain and improve
technology
. Books help people focus more than reading online. Because while reading online you might open other websites or social websites which may lose your concentration. So the conclusion is both books and
technology
 has their own importance. As many books are still available in paper form only
on the other
hand in
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hand, in
 today’s world we can’t ignore the
technology
 part
also
 as
technology
 is a big part of our society and we are relying on it.
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