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Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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Leisure activities are a part of children's life and are practiced worldwide, but certain individuals think that the purpose of
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 activities should be educational or it will just be frittering away
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 essay will argue that leisure exercises are meant to give relief and must not include
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. Certain demographics of society believe that activities done for fun at school should include
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 because they feel that children should be learning all the
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 in order to fit in
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 fast paced world and be ahead.
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, a family in my neighbourhood admitted their child in school when he was only 2 years young and not only that, but they made him read books when other kids used to play outside. Since the competition has taken over parents' minds, they now consider educating the child in every way possible.
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 some people are in favour of combining
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 and relaxation the fact can not be denied that leisure exercises are as important as studies. Activities like sports, rides and gardening must not include
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 but relief. An Italian psychologist,
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, conducted a survey in schools and found out that children who took part in sports performed better in studies than those who did not.
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, free
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 bustle has its own benefits and must not be
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educated
. In conclusion,
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 essay argued that even if people who support the idea of adding
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 to leisure
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 have their justifiable reasons
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 act is wrong and should not be practiced at all and studies and free
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 activities should be kept separated.
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