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Some people think that children should receive formal training at schools on how to be a good parents in future. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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School is that place where children get knowledge and education a few individual thought that children must get formal training at school
time which
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time, which
 will to help to good parents in
future
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the future
.
First
 and foremost,
such
 an insight and the understanding of parents’ life will definitely enlighten them with all the sacrifices
done
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 by their parents and other family members for their upbringing. As a consequence, they will respect and value the family more and more.
Secondly
, with inculcating family values, children will become more responsible and acquire serious approach for personal and professional goals. Our society has witnessed the stories of many children
with poor family
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with a poor family
 backgrounds, where parents worked hard for basic amenities and children revitalize their
life
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lives
 with great achievements.
Such
 success sometimes initiates chain reactions and siblings
also
 get motivated and inspired.
Lastly
, during training will children will
also
 get acquainted
dos
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do's
 and
don’ts
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Don’ts
, to be good parents and
such
 a precious information during early phase may strengthen the basic foundations of not only their lives but
also
 infuse excellent properties to the society.
On the contrary
, many argue for the professional and vocational training of children to secure better financial future. But my inclination is towards the universally acknowledged fact “better parents give excellent gentlemen to society”.
Therefore I
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Therefore, I
 strongly believe that
such
 training will fructify with worthy positive outcomes

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