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Some people believe that television programmes are of no real value for childrevn How far do you agree or disagree????

#people #television #programmes #value #childrevn
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Most of the people think that
children
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 television
programmes
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 have no any relevance for
children
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 life.
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,at present most of the channels are broadcasting many good
programmes
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 and those focusing at the education of
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 in different ages of life, these
programmes
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 are educational
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 informative enough to make
children
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 relax
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 learning.
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, I am in the opinion that_ all the programs do not have any value. Amidst of heavy and busy schedules of the
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 today, National geography, Animal Planet. ~will create good understanding about the
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 environment,
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 is where
children
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 get understanding about deferent species of the
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. Sometime
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 will lead some
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 to learn environment as a subject tIn addition watching BBC, CNN will enhance
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 communication skills
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 certain
programmes
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 will enlarge the capacities of
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 to
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 phenomenon
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 to improve their language skills. ~
For instance
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 in Sri Lanka very recently there is a
programme
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 have started call cookery with culture~ (nonsence), ~in
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programme
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 talk about different cultural foods and how it make, but
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 the
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 is trying to give a message on cultural diversity,
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 is an ideal
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 for
children
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 to learn others cultural values and norms~ There is a recent
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programme
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 being telecasted to demonstrate how typical foods of each culture are prepared and thereby to promote cultural diversity. *It is a good example that education of
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 can be possible through extra-curricular activities, like cooking.* There is a recent
programme
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 being telecasted to demonstrate how typical food of each culure are prepared and thereby to promote cultural diversity. ~
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, now a days
children
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 are more engaged with their education activities and feel really exhausted and stressed
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 they need some leisure time for relaxed.~ _ As
children
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 are more exhausted with class room studies, these practical and creative
programmes
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 will add value to lessons that they follow in the school.
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, by watching cartoon network,
children
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 enter into the wonder
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 and feel fresh and energetic.
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 some
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 channels run talent shows which provide good platforms for young
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 to shows their talent and nourish their skills._ ( with these two points I have my own arguments that these will create a negative impact: 1) cartoons- competative and conflict mentality among
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 2)
programmes
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 like talent shows make your moral high and parents boost chodren in a very selfish and competitive way.) In conclusion, *I would like to reiterate that under the supervision of parent
children
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 should have an opportunity to watch some
TV
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programme
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* s ( good point: but spoilled with a bad ending) ~and that will enhance their knowledge in different ways
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 there are good
programmes
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 will create
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 to gain many new ideas for their life and
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 will create quality person for the earth~, ~
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 "I am" *strongly believe* that Television
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 have some value for
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 life~. In conclusion I would like to reiterate that under the supervision of parents
children
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 should have an opportunity to watch
TV
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 prgrammes
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