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Would you like to live a long, calm life until 100 years old or would you prefer a shorter life but much more intense. Decide and explain your reasons.

#life #years
I think, I would like to live on earth a long
time
.Because through
this
 I will explore more thing on earth as well as I will see the development of our nation.I am going to discuss my reason why I would like to live in earth about one decade. Now a days people have certainly less
time
 and people cannot be enjoy the nature things and development, they busy at work, because these everything is completely expensive
also
 children's education.Human half
life
 struck in these kind of things.So they give less
time
 to their family and relatives.They can enjoy their extra
life
 with happiness.
Moreover
, they can spend their with their
life
 partner. They can go for a long journey and visit more places.They can be given more
time
 to their children. To sum up, no doubt shorter period
time
 is important in these days because population is growing dramatically year by year.
However
, the long period of
life
 has their own advantage.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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