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COMPLETING UNIVERSITY EDUCATION IS THOUGHT BY SOME TO BE THE BEST WAY TO GE A GOOD JOB. ON THE OTHER HAND, OTHER PEOPLE THINK THAT GETTING EXPERIENCE AND DEVELOPING SOFT SKILLS IS MORE IMPORTANT. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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In
this
 current world, there is a lot of competition and
job
 are limited. Some people believe that it is of utter importance to gather
experience
 and improve skills, while others argue that having a
college
 is a great way to fetch a
job
.
Although
, speaking skill, builds confidence, I tend to agree with the latter argument as universities have better infrastructure to mould a person for a better career. The most significant advantage of
experience
 and skill set is the confidence. People often feel pressurised if they lack knowledge, but
experience
 people with the proper skill set overcome their negative's. They are aware of their strength and present themselves in a proper way.
For example
, a technician can assemble a computer and upgrade it whenever needed. It is because, he has the skills and
experience
 to successfully complete
this
 task.
on
Suggestion
On
 the other hand, the universities create an infrastructure for an all round development of students. Nowadays, multinationals, along with Universities are creating curriculum to train students as per the industry need. Providing them an edge over other candidates, when applying for
job
Suggestion
a job
jobs
the job
. To illustrate
this
, most of the recruiters ask for a
college
 degree, as it allows them to filter candidates and left with lesser candidates to deal with.
Also
, Universities have campus drive in which companies, visit
college campus
Suggestion
college campuses
the college campus
 for recruitment and helping students to fetch a
job
 even before they graduate. In conclusion, even though, soft skills and
experience
 are great assets to have. In my opinion, a
college
 degree is a must have in today's world as it not only train you
for
Suggestion
in
 the corporate world, but
also
, provides a push to fetch a
job
.

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