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a lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism industry.

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Tourism is a
way
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 of
life
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 in most countries nowadays. Most places in the continents depend on sight seeing as a means of livelihood.The advantages of tourism is t
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 and growth of the
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country, culture
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country's
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le coming into another
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 for sight seeing enable the
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 situation where we have a lot of persons obtaining visas of a particular
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money they are using to obtain the visa is going to the particular
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 they are visiting .
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s that in 2010 almost 10million people applied for Dubai visa .
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people generally are willing to learn about other countries
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 helps to know how to behave and act upon arrival It is always good to know some particular details about the
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that some of the visitors might disrespect the
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cent research shows that 20,000 people attends Osun festival in Nigeria yearly in order to learn their
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t seeing is learning about different other countries
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ver the advantages outweighs the disadvantages because people are always willing to travel outside their
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 to learn new things .To
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ism is a
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 and its add more values to most countries because its
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roves their
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 and increases their population.

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