Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas now many suffer loneliness and health problems. What are the causes of this and what are some solutions?

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It is argued that, nowadays, the majority of people are suffering from the loneliness and health related issues whereas, in the past, older people used to spend most of their time with family and friends because of which they were happier and healthier.

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essay will suggest that the biggest problem of

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phenomenon is the lack of time and it can be solved by making the balance between the daily activities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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0Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Happiness
Health
Exercise
Spending time
Loneliness
Health problems
Causes
Solutions
Lifestyle
Priorities
Social interaction
Physical activity
Advancements in technology
Promote
Engaging
Opportunities
Awareness
Family
Community

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Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas now many suffer loneliness and health problems. What are the causes of this and what are some solutions?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Environmental problems are too big for individuals countries and individual persons to address. In other words, we have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at an international level. What is your opinion?

You recently organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter. --describe the party and how it went --explain why you were pleased with the hotel service. --suggest some improvements that the hotel could make.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Many research found that some food and drink products containing bad substance for human, therefore it must be banned from the market. To what extent do you agree or disagree?