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Some groups of people have benefited from modern communication technology but some people have not benefited at all. Do you agree or disagree?

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The nowadays majority of humans get advantage from contemporary
communication
technology
also
 there are people who have not benefited The past few decades have seen a significant improvement of communications
technology
 in a modern society. Some people proclaim that
such
 a development is beneficial to many aspects of human being’s life while others disagree with it and contend that it leads to negative outcomes.I personally agree with
this
 opinion totally because the people became live more comfortable than
last
 year Firs of all
,
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,
youngsters are the ones who receive the most assistance from developing
technology
 in terms of information exchange. The young are agile and quick on the uptake; they can easily learn to stay up to date with improved
technology
 at rocket-speed and use it to serve their purposes. It is hard for young people to imagine their life without email, messengers, Skype and other kinds of social media; since they use them very often in chatting or even group-studying with their friends, especially when there is a large distance between them.
For instance
, looking at the statistics we can see due to
whatsapp
,
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,
messenger and Skype has reduced demand to the mail than
last
 years
On the other hand
, most of people who cannot benefit from
communication
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communication, technology
technology
 people over sixty because they consider social
communication
 very artificial and uninteresting
,
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,
therefore
 they prefer
communication
 in real life rather than on social networks.
However among them
Suggestion
However, among them
 there are humans who have already gotten used to the
communication
technology
.One more example, approximately twenty years ago, it was difficult for parents to communicate with their children, because of
this
, many parents forbade their children to study abroad,
nevertheless
, now after the development of Skype and other
communication
 technologies, it has become easier to communicate. In conclusion,I agree that
technology
 only serves a certain group of people, which is the young, while it brings no advantages and even drawbacks to the old age group
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