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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter -Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college -Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her -Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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The chart illustrates a survey result of four tourist attractions in Britain visited by
tourist
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tourists
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 in the year 1999. It
also
 shows the
people
visited
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in
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different
theme
parks
. Overall, the
theme
parks
 and the museums & galleries were the most visited spots in the UK and about half of the visitors in the
parks
 opted for the Blackpool Pleasure Beach. About 38 per cent of
people
 toured
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theme
parks
 and almost the same number of
people
 went to the museums and the galleries.
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, a quarter of the tourists preferred in combined, the historic houses and the monuments (16%) and wildlife and zoos (9%). The
theme
parks
, which were the most preferred tourist destination, had 47 per cent
people
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 who visited the Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Whereas, Alton Towers and Pleasureland had 17% and 16%, respectively, while
Cheringston
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Cherington
 World of Adventures and Legoland had 10% each of the visitors.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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