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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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In modern day society,
education
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 has become a vital aspect of every child’s life. Educational facilities tend to offer a wide range of subjects aimed at educating children and teaching them various skills. Fundamental subject areas are said to be mathematics, science and
languages
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language
education
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 it is commonly agreed that these subjects are vital for a child’s educational upbringing, opinions differ when it comes to the subject of human science. Whilst some believe that subjects
such
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 as how to be a
parent
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education
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 is an important part of growing up, others believe that it should not be taught in schools, as it is considered a waste of time and resources. The supporters of the subject, how to be a good
parent
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education
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, argue that social formation is beneficial for children, because it offers a manner of develop skills early in their lives. Abilities
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 as how to influence people and how to make
first
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 aids are fundamental when you have been developing a child. Often the opponents of
society
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society, education
education
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 propose that a more rationally based
education
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 will benefit children later on in their lives, as they will be able to perceive and comprehend the logical aspects of life more easily. Personally, I believe that teach a kid
for
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to
 be a good
parent
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 should be taught in schools and that it is not a waste of time and resources. I learned from my father's example and I believe it helped me to be a family man.
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, some kids did not have the same opportunity, because of that it is important for a child to learn about thinking
humanly
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humanist
 and to take a break from logical subjects occasionally. In conclusion, how to be a good
parent
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 should be taught at school, because it enables children to learn how to create a
son
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 and to introduce more about culture and human interaction.

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