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Some people say that success is ’10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work’. Is hard work the key to success, or is talent also important?

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No
one
want
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wants
 to be a loser in their life, they propose
success
 as the main aim to reach. But everyone
know
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knows
 it is not easy. They have their own views about which
one
 is the key to
success
, hard work or
talent
.
However
,
Accept space
,
 I believe both of them have their position on the way to be
success
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successful
. On the
one
 hand, the price of
success
 is hard work. Winners never quit and quitters never win. No
one
 can reach their goal in only
one
 try
,
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,
 except they are extremely lucky. The more they practice
,
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,
 the closer
success
 they come
.
Accept space
.
 The repeat action whenever they
fail
undergo an emotional sensation or be in a particular state of mind
feel
 will let them know where the mistakes
was
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were
. After many
time
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times
 correcting them, they get what they want.
For instance
, a chef can not make an appetizing spaghetti unless he
try
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tries
 until finding the right recipe.
On the other hand
,
talent
 help achieve
success
 easier. In some field like art or sport
,
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,
talent
 is very important. If your singing skill was awful
,
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,
even you have practice very hard
,
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,
you still have to accept that your
skill just improve
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skill, just improves
skill just improves
 a little but would not make you a singer
.
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.
Beside
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Besides
,
talent not
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talent, not
 only help you more confident to solve the difficulty but
also
 shorten the time you achieve your desire. In conclusion, everyone has their goals. If they can

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