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Write about the following topic. In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

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Smoking is a big disease in several countries in the world and several governments set multiple policy, which do not allow people to smoke in common areas. If someone addicted to smog should go outside the place boundary to have some Pugh.
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 excellent rule and regulation made by the authorities makes me to be agree with the statement. The heart attack is very common in these day’s and in linked with the exhaust. Several medical reports by world health organization (WHO) mentioned that 85% of heart failure occurrences just because of the cigarette. The reason behind these highly statistics are the people are smoking in common places, which are not affecting on their own health but as well as damaging other peoples. Because of
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 careless, smoking became a very common habit in between the society included all ages, which pushed the nations to create many rules to get rid of that disease. Pollution is a big risk to our ecosystem and different kinds of electrical & another cigarette are participating in the role. It causes the people do soot more in public places where you don’t require a fire litter, just charged your cigarette and have a fun of vapor. After those issues many nations set the laws, even to not pollution on the road or street (Singapore is the top one), which helps other people to be safe from the carbon air. I am very happy to see these new policies and action taken by the higher commissions.
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 will help us a lot to become healthy and stay fit with our family. These rules hold highly important to safe our new generation from the bad habit.
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