The diagrams show total global population between 1900 and 2000, and its proportions according to region.
This
graph illustrates the global population
from the year
1900 to 2000 along with
with the regional proportional values in percentage.
Overall
, the population
has been
significantly increased all over the world Unnecessary verb
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at the end
of the period. In addition
, the regional number in year
is 1.6billion at 2000 it reached to 6billion.
In the Add an article
the year
year
1900 overall
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the overall
population
is below 2 billion
and it slightly increased in 1920 then
it drops down in 1930 to 1 billion
people. Moreover
, the population
is not stable and its
under Replace the word
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it is
2billion
though it has fluctuations until 1970. After that, the Correct your spelling
2 billion
population
gradually increased to 6 billion
in the year
2000.
While
looking for more details, In 1900, Asia and Europe had 60% and 25% of the world's population
comparing
to other countries, but both Change the form of the verb
compared
were
decreased by 6% and 9% in 2000. Latin America and Africa had a little growth in 2000 with 8% and 10% compared to 1900 with 3% and 4%. Unnecessary verb
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Whereas
North America and other remains same in bot
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both
year
with 5% and 3%. Middle East and North Africa were added in the
2000 with Change the article
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the
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a
population
of 6%.Submitted by lbb89632 on
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