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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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We are living in an era of technology and innovative solutions. At every doorstep, in every vicinity there is a startup and new ways of achieving more with less, new products that give us more convenience. In
such
 a dynamic world, the levels of marketing and advertising has definitely increased – and everyone wants to catch the
next
 consumer. In my view, advertising is a double edged sword and every individual needs to take all the information provided with a grain of salt and perform his
/
her own assessment. Advertising helps the consumers to be more informed about the choices available, pros and cons of every product
/
service,
for example
, if we talk about the insurance policies/ mutual fund advertisements – these definitely help consumers understand the importance of investments for a better future. These ads help every
individual whether
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individual, whether
 it is-a teenager/ a young working professional/ married couple/ sole family provider/ senior citizens understand all the options they have to invest and save for a better insured future
/
to help in uncertain times. But at the same time, these same ads have a lot of conditions in fine print, and no individual should purchase a plan without knowing all details- just based on a print
/
television advertisement. The purpose of advertisements is education & convenience
/
ease of information awareness and what that means is that every individual needs to absorb
this
 and perform
further
 research to take any
further
 action. We live in a world of excessive information flow, and all of us need to adapt to take these and make our own educated judgments. Convenience can’t come at the cost of well being.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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