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Some people believe that televison is a power ful education tool other people believe that televison is nothing more than mindless entertainment a d should be discouraged

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television
 is a powerful educationa tool other mass think
television
 is nothing morethan senseless amusement my opinion is 70%and30%
To begin
 with
televison
 is a powerful for a education it is a help for
child
 learning
televison
 is in top priority List of each people
child
 can watch news get knowledge and nations activity and
child
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television
 is a mindless is a true
child
 can get more
time
 vasting for
television
child
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televison
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child
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child
 not
time
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televison
 is a powerful education excess spending of
time
 on tv i think
child
 should allow that limted
time
 on watch
televison

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