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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#visitors #attractions
Country monuments visit cost, it has a fluctuated
price
 based on the nationality, is a heated-up subject and should be taken the
highly
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highest
higher
 consideration. It is believed that tourists should pay more than Original inhabitants for visiting the county`s monuments. I am supportive of the opinion that foreigners should pay more.
This
 essay with discuss,
firstly
, the benefits of imposing more fees on the foreigners on the historical attractions and
country
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country's
 economy.
Secondly
, why do locals should not bear more fees on seeing their own cultural places, followed by a reasoned conclusion. Historical attractions are existed
since
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for
 thousands of years, and these monuments need some sort of preservation and special care to keep it in a good condition to
last
 long. Continues visiting
by
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with
 people at the historical places along with severe
environment
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environmental
 conditions may destroy the precious structure;
therefore
, money should be arranged to fund the preservation process.
For example
, government
impose
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imposes
 different
price
 to the foreign visitors to secure the required budget required for any maintenance or repairs for
such
 important heritage. People, who live in the country,
are benefited
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benefit
 from the low prices introduced by
government
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the government
 on
such
 visits, but there is a justified reason behind the low
price
 applied for the
these
plural of that
those
 who are visiting the historical places.
For instance
, residents are exposed to pay several
taxes which
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taxes, which
 are applied by the
government
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government, such
such
 on the wages, roads, facilities and so on.
Hence
, it is unfair to treat them like foreigners and force them pay
same
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the same price
price
. To sum up, applying high ticket`s
price
 of the historical places for tourists is valid, but it should be controlled and monitored to seduce many people from all over the world.
This
 is will reflect to boost the economy and country development.
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