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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of time since digital technology is now replacing their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #time #technology #function
Technological advancements have made life easier. Several areas of the Economy had blossomed due to Technological inputs. One of these areas
are
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is
, getting educative information available
by
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from
 search engines
such
 as Google e.t.c. During the early 90s, the only way you could source for
informations
a message received and understood
information
 was through the
library
, but now Computers, Laptop connected to the internet, can make information easily accessible, but with all these new developments, should there still be investments in public libraries.
This
 essay would state why I think Public
libabries
a building that houses a collection of books and other materials
libraries
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 not be regarded as waste. Generally, not every individual can find the use of
Technology
 easy.
This
 may be due to their
mind set
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
, not being able to correspond and move with the flow of new
technology
.
For
example my
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example, my
 Grandfather, still believes in going to the
library
, because he does not know how to operate a phone, laptop or even the search engines,
besides
 for a large part of his life he has been used to the
library
, so it will take a long
time
 for him to adjust to the demands of technological advancements. Another reason is availability of material, the
library
 cannot be
destroyed it's
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destroyed, it's
 easily accessible by anyone, at any possible
time
, whereas
technology
 cannot be
access
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accessed
accessible
 at any
time
.
what
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What
 I can use to back up
this
 claim would be most people are not
financial
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financially
 buoyant to buy
technology
 and relatively
this
 advancements cost money. Some people believe why waste money buying a phone or
electronical
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
gadjets
a device or control that is very useful for a particular job
gadgets
, when they can simply go to the
library
 to get valuable
informations
a message received and understood
information
. In conclusion, one cannot deny that
Technology
 has made things
alot
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a lot
 easier, but another set of
thoughts believe
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thoughts, believes
thoughts believes
 it would take
alot
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a lot
 of
time
 and energy for the elder people to understand how to use
this
technology
. I feel both libraries as well as
technology
 should be invested
on
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in
. There should be a fine balance between the two as both are still useful to all parties
.
Accept space
.
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