People believe that the government should financially support retired people, others believe that retired people should care for themselves. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.
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wage
from Suggestion
a wage
wages
goverments
while others believe that people who are retired should care the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
themself
without any reflexive form of "them"
themselves
support
.As for me ,
retired people have Accept space
,
lack
of ability to get salary as a Suggestion
a lack
workers
and they are Suggestion
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this
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people who are retired Accept space
,
dont
have any ability to earn do not
don't
enought
as much as necessary
enough
money
for their basic requirements.For this
reason goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
support
might be precious for their life,
since the average age for becoming retire is Accept space
,
aproximately
50 years old.So after (of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
approximately
this
age unfortunately
people will lose their Accept comma addition
age, unfortunately
pyhsical
powers and maybe they will lose their mental healths.involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
Thatswhy
,
people who are retired might be Accept space
,
unsuccesfull
in their not successful; having failed or having an unfavorable outcome
unsuccessful
worklifes
after this
age.Unfortunately they
might not hire as a worker from any company.For Accept comma addition
Unfortunately, they
this
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, they might not find a a rational motive for a belief or action
reason
reasons
enought
budget to contınue their life and if they have a as much as necessary
enough
families they
will not feed them without any Suggestion
family, they
family they
goverments
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government
governments
government's
support
.In
addition retired
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addition, retired
worklife
.So people who are retired are eager to devote Suggestion
work life
themself
for their reflexive form of "them"
themselves
grandchildens
or wifes
rather than workplaces.They have a a married woman; a man's partner in marriage
wife
wife's
wives
rights
to contınue their Suggestion
right
lifes
as like a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
this
,
since nearly all Accept space
,
goverments
have life ınsurance and they cut their workers budgets when they are working.People give permission the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
goverments
for their the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
further
lifes
.a characteristic state or mode of living
life
files
life's
Thatsy
why fortunately retired people actually take their budgets from Suggestion
That's
goverments
when they are retired.
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
On the other hand
,
people who are retired might not have any Accept space
,
support
countries economies. In contrast they
might be Accept comma addition
contrast, they
hurden
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heading
goverments
to increase the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
workers
salariesSuggestion
workers'
,
since Accept space
,
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
seperates
their budgets not only active workers but act as a barrier between; stand between
separates
also
retired people.When they cut retired people
salaries active luckıly workers might earn much more Suggestion
peoples'
peoples
money
when we compare the their todays salaries.Besides
,
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,
,
since they contrıbute Accept space
,
countries
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countries'
,
producing stuff.But unfortunately retired people might not have any positive Accept space
,
affect
on a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
goverments
economic situations.Suggestion
government's
governments
On the
contrary they
are getting Accept comma addition
contrary, they
money
from goverments
without any working.
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governments
,
governments should subsidize retired people as long as they liveAccept space
,
,
since they are taking Accept space
,
money
that is
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from governments.Suggestion
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addition retired
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,
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separates
separate
paying
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paid
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