People believe that the government should financially support retired people, others believe that retired people should care for themselves. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.

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Some of the people argued that retired people should take
wage
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a wage
wages
from
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
while others believe that people who are retired should care
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
without any
support
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.As for me
,
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,
retired people have
lack
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a lack
of ability to get salary as a
workers
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worker
and they are
notbulk
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not bulk
for the governments. In
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essay ı will discuss both views with valid arguments and examples. On the one hand
,
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,
people who are retired
dont
do not
don't
have any ability to earn
enought
as much as necessary
enough
money
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for their basic requirements.For
this
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reason
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
support
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might be precious for their life
,
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,
since the average age for becoming retire is
aproximately
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
approximately
50 years old.So after
this
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age unfortunately
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age, unfortunately
people will lose their
pyhsical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
powers and maybe they will lose their mental healths.
Thatswhy
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,
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,
people who are retired might be
unsuccesfull
not successful; having failed or having an unfavorable outcome
unsuccessful
in their
worklifes
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after
this
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age.
Unfortunately they
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Unfortunately, they
might not hire as a worker from any company.For
this
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reasosn
a rational motive for a belief or action
reason
reasons
, they might not find a
enought
as much as necessary
enough
budget to contınue their life and if they have a
families they
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family, they
family they
will not feed them without any
goverments
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government
governments
government's
support
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.
In
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addition retired
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addition, retired
people spent their somewhat 30 years with working and when they became retired will not confidence to continue their
worklife
Suggestion
work life
.So people who are retired are eager to devote
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
for their
grandchildens
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or
wifes
a married woman; a man's partner in marriage
wife
wife's
wives
rather than workplaces.They have a
rights
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right
to contınue their
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
as like
this
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,
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,
since nearly all
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
have life ınsurance and they cut their workers budgets when they are working.People give permission
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
for their
further
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lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
files
life's
.
Thatsy
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That's
why fortunately retired people actually take their budgets from
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
when they are retired.
On the other hand
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,
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,
people who are retired might not have any
support
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countries economies. In
contrast they
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contrast, they
might be
hurden
a line of text serving to indicate what the passage below it is about
heading
for the
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
to increase
workers
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workers'
salaries
,
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,
since
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
seperates
act as a barrier between; stand between
separates
their budgets not only active workers but
also
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retired people.When they cut retired
people
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peoples'
peoples
salaries active luckıly workers might earn much more
money
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when we compare the their todays salaries.
Besides
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,
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,
active workers affect countries economic situations positively
,
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,
since they contrıbute
countries
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countries'
economies
,
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,
producing stuff.But unfortunately retired people might not have any positive
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
on
goverments
Suggestion
government's
governments
economic situations.
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contrary they
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contrary, they
are getting
money
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from
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
without any working. In my opınıon
,
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,
governments should subsidize retired people as long as they live
,
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,
since they are taking
money
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that is
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loan
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loaned
from governments.
Thats
Suggestion
That's
why they
dont
do not
don't
have any negative affects governments economic situations.
In
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addition retired
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addition, retired
workers
Suggestion
workers'
salaries
dont
do not
don't
be taken from active workers budgets
,
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,
since governments
seperates
act as a barrier between; stand between
separates
separate
their budgets differently when they are
paying
Suggestion
paid
.
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