The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006
The chart illustrates which typologies of digital
games
(mobile phone
games
, online
games
, console
games
, handheld
games
) had been sold from 2000 to 2006. The units are expressed in $bn.
Overall
handheld
games
are the most sold of all and their global
sales
increased from almost $ 12000000 in 2000 to arrive just below $ 18000000 in 2006. All the
games
considered
rised
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raised
their global
sales
but the console
games
, as it is possible to see the money spent on these
games
decrease every year, from almost $ 6000000 in 2000 to approximately $ 3000000 in 2006. In the year 2000 mobile phone
games
and online
games
had no
sales
, the online
games
started to
be sell
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in 2001 whit a very little amount of
earns
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. But
then
, from 2002 to 2006 their
sales
increased rapidly until reaching more or less $ 8000000.
The mobile
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phone
games
started to have considerable global
sales
in
the
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2002
,
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when they were at the same level as the ones of
the
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online
games
.
Then
their
sales
increased constantly until 2006,
where
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the sale are lower than handheld
games
and online
games
but more than
the
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double
of
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those of
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console
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the console
a console
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game
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games
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.

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