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More and more people buy a wide range of household goods such as television, microwave oven and rice cooker. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, many people are purchasing verity of household items
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 as television, microwave oven and rice cooker to make a
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 of latest
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. I feel, it is a great achievement as the world is becoming smaller, there is a huge demand for
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 products in each individual’s life. But it is not necessary to adopt all of them.
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 with, in 90’s, when I was a child, my mother
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 to cook everything on a gas stove from breakfast to dinner. Anyhow, now it's an an entirely different scenario, today my mother boils egg in an egg boiler, baking cakes in an oven and preparing rice in a rice cooker, at a very short time.
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, we
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 go to laundry shop anymore, we wash our clothes at home, we
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 wash
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 utensils in a sink, because they directly go to a dishwasher. What comes
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 is, a bit concerns me, as
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 is increasing our expectations are
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 growing. We are becoming lazier, we
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 want to work-hard, our dependency on
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 is ruining our healthy lifestyle. So much, that we
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 even need to move from our resting place and we can operate all
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machines thro
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these machines
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ugh Wi-Fi. According to a research,
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 is a major cause of obesity.
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, everything comes at a cost. I suggest, we should always keep a balance in our life. Things that are not required, we should not buy.
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, a dishwasher is something
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 not necessary, if we maintain a good habit of washing our utensils right after its
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, in my opinion, exposure to the latest
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 is a great deal but has to be adopted for our convenient not to harm ourselves.

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