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Some people think that students who don’t take a break in studies between high school and the university are at a disadvantage compared to students who travel and work after high school before further continuing their education. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #students #don’t #break #studies #school #university #travel #work #education
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Higher
education
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 after high school brings better opportunities for those who achieve said level of knowledge.
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 is one of the main reasons why more people attend
university
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 to seek a
university
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 degree. There is the assumption that people who travel and
work
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 before applying for
university
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 have better chances to succeed in life, but in my opinion,
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 is not game changing. Enrolling in
University
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 after finishing high school is a great idea. Those who
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 at age 18 or 19 have higher chances of graduating between ages 22 and 23.
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, supported
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by
 the fact of owning a
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 degree, provides them with lots of job opportunities.
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, throughout their
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education students
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education, students
 can find opportunities to
work
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 part time at
university
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 helping at professorships or tutoring other students. One significant drawback of enrolling in
university
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 just after high school is due to the fact that some people don’t really know what they want to study.
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 could cause them to drop out and change careers, or just forget about higher
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.
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, taking a year off to travel and
work
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 gives people the opportunity to discover what they really want to achieve in life. By learning about new cultures and experiencing
work
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 at
first
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hand they
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hand, they
 obtain a broader view of the world, their likes and capabilities. Not only that, but gaining earlier experience before seeking for a higher
education
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 prepares them for the
work
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 they want to accomplish in the future.
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, one important detail to consider is that sometimes people who
work
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 before going to
university
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 enjoy the fact of earning their money and being independent, which makes them consider the idea of leaving
university
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 aside and keep working. All in all, both choices are valid and have their advantages. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is important to seek higher
education
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. A year off can be necessary when one is not sure what to study, but it is important to not forget that goal on the road and aim for
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education
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 in order to get better opportunities in the future.

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