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The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#value #exports #fuel #food #goods #country #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The line graph gives information about the
amount
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number
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 of fuel exports and cost, food and produced goods
export
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exported
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 by a country between 2000 to 2005.
It is clear that
 the demand for material falls significantly, but
rise
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rises
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 dramatically over the years.
Moreover
,
rate
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the rate
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 of electricity, cuisines and manufactured stocks fluctuates or
decrease
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decreases
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along
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over
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 the period. In 2000,
output
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the output
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 of gas of electricity exports was 300000 million and suddenly fall down in
next
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the next
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 two years
at
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to
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 250000.
Then
 we saw that in 2005 it rises quickly
at
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to
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 425000. In
year
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the year
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 2000 the expense
of
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for
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 ammunition and meal were 400000 and 180000
millions
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million
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 respectively. In the general exportation of oil decreased steeply at 200000 in 2005 and
stock
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the stock
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 of snacks few more than
the
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apply
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200000.
In contrast
, manufactured goods remain constant during the 5 years at 400000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "falls" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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