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many people think social media websites have a negative effects on individual and society do you agree or disagree?

#people #media #websites #effects #society
Noone
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No one
 nowadays
doesnot
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does not
 have social
websites espically
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websites, especially
websites especially
facebook
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Facebook
.
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.
 Individual and
society
 can take
adventage
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
 of social media
websites
 through many ways but many people think reverse and see that they have a negative
effects
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effect
.
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.
Iam
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I am
 not
comeletly
 agree with
this
 opinion
.
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.
social
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Social
 networks are very useful for one and
society
,
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,
 one has
facebook
Suggestion
Facebook
 can communicate anyone abroad and chatting face to face easily
.
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.
In addition
 to that
,
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,
 if
individual
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an individual
the individual
 has a website
,
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,
 he can
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 any courses in any website and has a
certificates
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certificate
 in short time
,
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,
this
 will save time and effort
.
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.
society
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
Society
 can take advantage of social
websites
,
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,
 through creating
websites
 for serving people to finish some social papers like car license and birth certificates that will help
society
 getting red of crowd in
govrnmental
relating to or dealing with the affairs or structure of government or politics or the state
governmental
 centres
.
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 on other side some yung people can use sociah networks to waste time or creating pages to spread unreal news

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