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very country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive.To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As a free
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care
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system
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 is no longer a privilege only found
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in developing
in developed
 countries, more and more developing countries are advocating to build their own free
health
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care
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 systems. I agree with the argument that every
country
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 should be able to provide basic and free
health
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care
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 services to its own
nations
a person who owes allegiance to that nation
nationals
. Ethically speaking, a
country
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 should have the ability to make everyone's basic
health
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care
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 needs met. By providing free
health
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care
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 services, even those who cannot afford the fees to treat their own diseases would be able to enjoy the services
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 That would mean a lot
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of
 the poor. In the most recent
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 outbreak, imagine if a
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 is not able to provide free services to those who are affected and who
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are unable
 to pay for the
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 fees.Not only would it be a tragedy
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for the
country
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. As those who cannot afford to pay the
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care
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 services won't seek for
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treatment plan
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a treatment plan
,
thiswould
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this would
 result in a potential spread of the disease. No
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matter whether
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are speaking
 about a level which personal needs should be met or speaking at a level
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where the
 whole
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's wealth fare should be considered, an accessible
health
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care
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system
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 which can provide free services can help the poor in a tremendous way. We are all human beings in the end. Economically speaking, as free
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 services
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become accessible
 to all citizens, the
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 condition of the labour force in
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country
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 is ensured. A Healthy labour force means the potential to create more value for the
country
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. Every year the
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economic
 loss caused by physical disabilities or mental disabilities among the
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 are of a working
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age
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age is
 huge. If a
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care
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system
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 is able to provide free services to these people, it would save the
country
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 a lot financially. In summary, I agree with the perspective that free
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care
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 services should be provided within each
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country even
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country, even
 if
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it means
 that the most advanced medical
treatment
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 would not be applied to patients via
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 a
system
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. I believe there would always be people who are willing to pay for the latest
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 plan out of their own pockets. In
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 case, it is not necessary to cover these treatments in the free services

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