Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Today, it is believed that successful sports professional are earning good
amount
of
money
over other sports professionals. Several people consider
this
phenomenon justified but others
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
it unethical. In my
opinion I
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opinion, I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that in today's
society
successful sports person earn more as compare to others due to
popularity
and great
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
in
such
sports. Nowadays,
majority
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the majority
of people prefer to watch cricket over other sports.
This
is due to the
popularity
and craze among the
society
towards that
sports
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sport
. It is absolutely true that most of the popular sports
person
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people
can earn good
amount
of
money
due to several reasons. The main reason behind it is
excessive
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an excessive amount
amount
of funding provided by the government to that particular sport authority through which they can attract the
society
towards that
sports
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sport
and the authority can generate
lot
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lots
of
money
by charging
few
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a few amount
amount
from public for sports tournament's. The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
reason is most of the popular brands make
proposal
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a proposal
to successful sports professional to become
brand ambassador
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brand ambassadors
a brand ambassador
.
However
, it is quite difficult to see
such
kind of opportunities and
popularity
in other sports. There should be equality in every sports
profession not
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profession, not
only in terms of
money but
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money, but
by providing proper and adequate facilities and
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
opportunities. Government should take action
in
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on
such
other sports profession where lack of opportunity and
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
growth is. Government should provide
adequate level
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an adequate level
of
fund
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funding
to
such sports authority
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the such sports authority
such sports authorities
so that they can as well rise and
society
can get attracted towards it.
This
leads to solve
such
phenomenon as our
society
belive
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believes
believe
believed
that successful sports person can earn huge
amount
of
money
.
For example
: I
persoy
English soldier killed in a rebellion against Henry IV (1364-1403)
Percy
experienced it when I asked a teenager that in which sports field do he want to make
carrier
if he get an opportunity and why? So he replied cricked and there is
shocking reason
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a shocking reason
behind it and it was
popularity
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the popularity
and huge
amount
of
money
in that field. In conclusion, I can say that successful sports professional can earn
lot
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a lot amount
the lot amount
amount
of
money
as compare to other profession.
However
,
this
issue can be resolved if
government
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the government
should take action by providing
equal level
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an equal level
of funding and good opportunities as well.
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