Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter • describe what you like about the library • say what you don’t like • make suggestions for improvements

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter regarding the public library and the improvements I think would be beneficial to most visitors.

Firstly

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, the aspect I really enjoy about the library is the variety of books I can find, from contemporary science fiction to historical artistic eras

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as the Art Nouveau.

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, the staff at the reception has proven very helpful and friendly. The things I do not enjoy are the disposition of bookshelves and the sitting area. More specifically, some bookshelves are damaged and it can be hard to find a seat available on weekends. I would like to recommend you to have the shelves renovated

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organise them in a new setup to make more room in the middle of the hall.

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way, more chairs and tables can be arranged in the space. I hope these recommendations can be helpful to you and I cannot wait to see the improvements you make in the library. Yours faithfully, Amanda Lago

Submitted by amandacflago23 on Sat Apr 27 2024

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coherence cohesion

To enhance coherence, transition phrases could be more varied and utilized to connect ideas more smoothly between paragraphs.

task achievement

To enhance task achievement, consider including more detailed suggestions for improvements, possibly with more specific examples or considerations for future implementations.

task achievement

Your letter effectively addressed all parts of the task, maintaining a clear and relevant response throughout.

coherence cohesion

Your use of paragraphs to organize the letter into clear sections (likes about the library, dislikes, and suggestions for improvements) aids in achieving a logical structure.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

167 words

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