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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart compares the expenditure on different
consumer
goods
 by the people of four European countries; namely Britain, France, Italy and Germany. At the first glance,
British
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the British
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 spent more money on
consumer
goods
while
Germans
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the Germans
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 spent the least. It is worth noticing that,
British
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the British
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 spent more than 170
thousand
 pound sterling
for
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on
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 photographic
films
 which is the highest amount spent on any
consumer
goods
. The British
also
 spent more than 160
thousand
 for purchasing
Toys
 and CDs, which is higher than that of
by
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any other nation. For perfumes, tennis racquets and personal stereos, they spent more than other nations as well.
On the other hand
, French people spent around 165
thousand
for
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 purchasing photographic
films
, which makes it the highest amount they spent on
consumer
goods
. French citizens spent about 158
thousand
 on
toys
 which is a tie with Italians. For photographic
films
,
toys
 and CDs, their spending totalled
second
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the second
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 highest among the given four nations.
Finally
, they spent less than 150
thousand
 on remaining
consumer
goods
. Italian citizens spent around 150
thousand
 on personal stereos, tennis racquets and CDs
while
 they spent about 5
thousand
 more on photographic
films
 and
toys
.
Finally
, the Germans spent the least amount on all
consumer
 items than any other nation and their average spending was 145
thousand
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, goods, thousand, films, toys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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