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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The following line graph provides
informations
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 about how American people used to spend their
time
 from
1980
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the 1980
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 year to
2010
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the 2010
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 year.
Overall
, at the beginning of
the
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1980 watching TV accounted
about
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 60% of the most
practiced
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practised
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 activities,
while
 surfing the internet was the lowest
activity
practiced
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practised
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.
Firstly
 both surfing the internet and reading were
practiced
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from
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 0% of the American population,
this
 situation changed from 1990 to 2010year,
where
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 they had a
rapidly
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increase
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, a similar situation occurred with hiking,
infact
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in fact
, at the beginning of the period just 20% of the population spent their
time
 on
this
activity
,
while
 after about 30 years it became the most popular one. In the far 1980 the majority of
americans
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Americans
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 used to spend their
time
 watching TV, but
afterewords
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afterwards
this
 practice had a slow
discrease
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decrease
increase
,
nevertheless
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 it still remained the
second
 more common
activity
practiced
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practised
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 nowadays. In
this
 century we can claim that the most
practiced
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practised
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 activities from
American
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the American
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 population in their spare
time
 are hiking, watching TV, reading and surfing the internet,
while
 the less
practiced
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practised
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activity
 is going to the theatre

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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